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2017年關(guān)于考研英語寫作之小作文講解
小作文是考研英語寫作中比較容易拿分,甚至拿高分的部分。可是由于小作文需要注意的地方比較多,加上考場上緊張、焦急,很多小伙伴會在這個地方出現(xiàn)不該有的失誤,F(xiàn)在,文都英語老師將以一篇學生寫的小作文為例,現(xiàn)場傳授在小作文部分勇奪高分的“秘籍”。我們先看下下面的范文。
范文:
Dear Li Ming
I am writing this mail is to congratulate on yours admitted to a university and put forward suggestion regarding the preparation for university life. The detailed information is listed as the following.
At the top of the list , the university is one of the most important parts of our life ,you may have a wonderful life in it. Another point I would like to draw your attention is that inthe campus , you may have much free time , you should take good advantage of it. In addition , there are many excellent people in the university ,you should be modest in it .
I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. And I am greatly grateful for your time and attention.
Truely yours
Zhang Wei
點評:
本篇作文的作者在每段開頭首行縮進4個字符,這點做的很不錯,但還是存在一些問題:
、鸥袷藉e誤
、貲ear Li Ming這個稱呼后面應該加逗號;
、趛ours后面也要加逗號。
、普Z法錯誤
、俚谝欢蔚谝痪湓捴杏袃蓚謂語動詞am writing和is;on是介詞,后面應該接動名詞,所以應該是admitting,但此處是“被錄取”,應該用被動。這句話應該改為:I am writing this mail to congratulate you on your being admitted into a university;
、趶牡诙慰,提出的建議不止一個,而suggestion可數(shù),所以應該用suggestions;
③詳細內(nèi)容如下,The detailed information is listed as follows和The detailed information is listed as the following都可以,只不過the following一般做前置定語,前面一個句子是常用的表達,后面一個句子用的較少;
、“在我們的生活中大學是最重要的部分之一”應該是in our life. Another point I would like to draw your attention is……I would like to draw your attention做后置定語,但這里要注意:雖然draw attention to是固定搭配,但這個to加不加都行。第二段的內(nèi)容還行,但是論述不夠充分,應適當拓展;
⑤最后要注意的是Truly yours的書寫,尤其是“Truly”的書寫;
⑶優(yōu)化建議
、俦硎“第一、第二、第三”的連詞:
To begin with, furthernore,/what is more, Last but not least
In the first place In the second place At last
②在第二段里面,建議提出一個觀點之后用一句話闡述。如果字數(shù)太多,可以只用2個觀點;如果字數(shù)偏少,則可以提出三個觀點,再略作闡述。
、郾硎“重要”的詞:crucial, fundamental, essential
文都英語老師認為,這篇文章總的來說沒有大的問題,都是細節(jié)性的。但是格式方面的問題是最基本的問題,也是最不該出錯的,平時要多注意。須知“細節(jié)決定成敗”,認真才能成功!
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